Comments on: Haru 5 QC

By: CP

CP — Mon, 01 Mar 2010 20:34:23 +0000

So, I made a little check for spelling and consistency. Previous eps have used “all right” and “!?”; thus:

00:57 Consistency: “?!” change to “!?”
01:08 Consistency: “Alright” change to “All right!”
01:12 Consistency: “Alright” change to “All right!”

By: The Gentleman Caller

The Gentleman Caller — Sun, 28 Feb 2010 06:04:59 +0000

1:33-1:37 – “Take this ball…” “If you dare!” “Eat this!” -> “Take this ball…” “If you dare and eat this!” I don’t like that it was split into three parts, especially because there wasn’t a pause in her second sentence.

The problem here is that both sound a little awkward. Perhaps something like.

“Take this ball if you dare!” “Eat this!”

But I’m not sure that that’s any better of a solution.
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2:31 – “show” -> “turn”

Not sure about this one. Haruhi’s probably the type to say “Now it’s my show.” rather than “Now it’s my turn.” It seems more in character for her.

By: PhantomCaller

PhantomCaller — Sun, 28 Feb 2010 02:55:31 +0000

In my defense, it would’ve been hilarious.

I remember in the last Nyoron one I also wanted to change one “Banzai” for “Congratulations Shinji”, to pay my respects to the mind-screw that was that episode. Took all my strength to hold that one back, honestly. =P

By: Blah

Blah — Sun, 28 Feb 2010 00:33:53 +0000

Not according to Google and Wikipedia:
Dodgeball: http://www.google.ca/search?hl=en&source=hp&q=define%3Adodgeball&btnG=Google+Search&meta=&aq=f&oq=
Dodge ball: http://www.google.ca/search?hl=en&q=define%3Adodge+ball&btnG=Search&meta=

Google corrects you if you type dodge ball.

By: phoenix923

phoenix923 — Sat, 27 Feb 2010 16:53:00 +0000

00:37 – “If we win… you return our PCs!” -> “If we win… you’ll return our PCs!”

00:44 – “Since you’ve lost before, it’s now absolute submission.” -> “Since you’ve lost before, you’re under absolute submission.”

00:53 – “Even my life” Line is late.

1:00-1:02 – Kyon and Yuki’s lines are a little late.

2:03 – “But if we move with full power,…” -> “But if we move at full power,…”

How about instead of calling the computer dodge ball game a game say virtual game or computer game to distinguish computer from reality.

Oh, and blah, dodge ball is two words. At least that’s what my spell checker is saying.

For the 3:25 line, I personally would like “Do not want” for that line because we all love memes. But if you want accurate spoken English, keep it as is.

By the way, this doesn’t qualify for a v2 or anything, but in Episode 4 you spelled my user name wrong as phoenix423 instead of 923 in the credits.

By: Shamisen Subs

Shamisen Subs — Sat, 27 Feb 2010 15:45:44 +0000

PC wanted to put “Do not want.” for that line. :3

By: Fronzel

Fronzel — Sat, 27 Feb 2010 15:41:18 +0000

Should the fact that the computer society wants to play a VIDEO game be specified throughout first minute or two? “Game” is vague in English. As it is, Haurhi says “a game is dopey” and then “let’s play a game”.

1:25- Just “Pty” is bit vague.

3:25- I’d prefer “We don’t want this” to “We don’t want this back” because it’s more blunt. They don’t want it at all, nevermind that Haruhi had it for a short time.

By: Blah

Blah — Sat, 27 Feb 2010 14:38:46 +0000

Chapters: http://www.megaupload.com/?d=RU9FWJRJ

0:15/0:35/1:22 – Dodgeball is one word
0:38 – “you return” -> “you will return”
1:01 – I think that both Kyon’s and Yuki’s lines are late
1:09/1:12 – “Alright” -> “All right”
2:31 – “show” -> “turn”
2:36 – Add an exclamation mark